This week's writing a free-verse poem task about my"
Nan's hands". We practised using semi-colons, a range of a sentence lengths and using better vocabulary. Our poems are based on an original poem written by Gary O'Connell.I chose to write about my Nan because she is so special to me.
I love to spend more time with her she so strong
My Nan's hands
are soft as a cute fluffy bunny;
her back is, sore as a broken bone :(
her legs, are tattooed(tattoos mean love,strength)
Her laugh is the joy to my heart ;
her voice, is alive to me.
posing,smiling so pride she the best
snapchat picture person ever
Hi Renei
ReplyDeleteThis is a lovely poem about your nan, I think she would be proud to see how well you have described her. I hope her back starts feeling better soon.
I like the idea about her tattoos. You could write it without brackets and that would tell readers how important these are to your nan.
Your last couple of lines need to be looked at again, the last idea gets a little lost (e.g. smiling with pride?).
Excellent effort!
Mr N
Kia Ora
ReplyDeleteI am Renei's Nan, yes I have tattoo's on my arms and leg :)
Aww this is lovely Monkey Mouse :)
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